Blog 4

This story was my character writing. It is a modern Cinderella story. This story goes along with the plot of the Disney Cinderella we all know but it has a few twists. In this writing I focused on the specific part where she is getting ready, going, and then leaving the dance rather than the whole Cinderella story. I wrote the character story from the view of Cinderella and Mary Claire wrote it from the view of Charming.

 

A Modern Cinderella Story 

(Cinderella’s perspective)

All I could think about was getting my chores done. I wanted so badly to go to the governor’s party tonight. The governor’s son, Charming, is supposed to find a girl he wants to marry at this party. Charming was a tall strong handsome man. He had blue eyes and light brown hair. I wasn’t really hoping to fall in love with Charming, I didn’t want my expectations that high, but I was hoping to find a boyfriend or a guy to at least to talk to.I was standing in our small well-kept house, thanks to me, with all my cleaning supplies. I couldn’t stay focused on cleaning today all I could do is stand there thinking about the party. I was finally finishing up my last window in the house. Everything from my evil step sister’s room to the basement had to be immaculate. I picked up all my cleaning supplies, put them away and headed to my room. I was ready to get in the shower and at last get ready for the party tonight. I wasn’t even sure I was going to actually be able to go; it all depended on my god mother. In my mind it was worth a shot, I didn’t care if I got caught I wanted to at least try and go. After my warm steamy shower I did my hair and makeup it wasn’t perfect but it’s all I could do myself. Next I put on the only somewhat formal dress I had. It was my stepsister dress she wore to another party many years ago.It was to short and had a stain on the right arm. But in my mind I was at least in a dress and hopefully going to the party. I stopped expecting anything when I was very young; my step mom and evil step sisters never bothered with me.

My step mom and sisters were just about to leave when I heard…

“I have more laundry for you!” hollered my stepmom. “You will have plenty of time to do it while you sit here alone and we are having fun at the party” she rudely added.

That was the last thing I wanted to hear. This would take more time delaying when I would get to the dance. This whole time I was hoping my godmother would make it here to help me out. She was going to help sneak me into the party it wasn’t much, but it was what I needed. I still wasn’t completely ready but I had finished with the laundry. Ding! Ding!The doorbell rang. OhhNoo! I wasn’t even close to being ready.I ran down the hard wood stairs of the attic and flung open the front door excited to see my godmother. She was the kind of woman that cared about everyone. She loved helping out and doing anything she could to help. She always wore a nice dress of some kind and her hair in a bun. To my surprise she was holding a large bag on a hanger and had a shoe box in her other hand.

“What is that?” I asked shocked.

“I figured you would need something nice to wear. Look at yourself!” she replied with a smirk.

I changed out of the ratty old dress I had on and put on the beautiful red dress, tall silver heels, and a silver sparkly mask she brought me. Thankfully the party was a masquerade. This would help me stay hidden from my stepmom and step sisters. My hair was in long loose curls with a silver clip pinning back my bangs. It was the most beautiful thing I had ever seen. I loved the way my whole outfit sparkled in the light. I now felt beautiful and ready to go. We left the house and moments later arrived at the party. I felt like such a rebel leaving the house without permission. I was so nervous. What if my step sister or step mom finds out I’m here? What if I don’t find a guy?Every possible thought was running through my mind.I had almost convinced myself not to walk in to the party but my godmother encouraged me to go on and try it out. I knew how much I wanted to go to this party and figured it was worth the risk. I walked up the marble stairs, concentrating hard on not falling in these six inch heels, into the governor’svery large mansion. There were so many people I didn’t know what to do. I suddenly felt very awkward. I arrived at the top of the stairs and stood there looking into the ballroom. There were crystal chandeliers hanging from the ceiling the size of my house. There were long tables full of every type of food you could imagine. There were so many people but there was one person that stood out; he was coming from the middle of the room walking straight toward me. At least I hoped he was walking toward me. It was Charming. Our eyes met for a quick second before I quickly looked away not expecting that.

He was now in front of me. He introduced himself…

“Hi I’m Charming.” His dreamy voice said.

“H-H-H-ii” I replied in the most awkward way possible.

“Would you like to dance?” he asked to my surprise. He still wanted to be with me even after my awkward hello, I said to myself. He pulled me away and asked if I wanted to dance. At first I felt very awkward; I was tripping over myself and concentrating pretty hard on not stepping on his feet. As the night went on my dancing improved and I managed not to see my stepmom or stepsisters once.At the end of the night we walked off into the backyard and went against the rules of the party. We both took off are masks so we could see each other’s faces.

“You’re beautiful,” he said sweetly. I smiled back at him trying not to act to excited. He was even better looking than I remembered. Being with him was no longer awkward, I was able to be myself around him and have fun. That night was the best night I’d had in a long time. When the party was over I went home very happy with how the night had played out. I couldn’t keep myself from smiling. I rushed home suddenly worried, hoping to make it home before my stepsister and stepmom. I was going to be in so much trouble if they found out I had been there. Luckily I made it home just before my step mom and sisters. I quickly changed out of my dress, into the clothes I had been doing my chores in, and hid my dress, shoes, and mask, in the bottom of my closet so no one would know what I had done that night.

As they walked in the door I was hollered “Hello. How was the party?”

“Ehh it was ok.”

“It wasn’t that much fun.”

“Some girl was with charming all night and they were having so much fun, I just wished it was me.” They all muttered something different about the party and how they wish it could have been better.

Later that night I heard Charming’s voice. Thinking I was just hearing things I walked down from the attic to see my step mom pushing him out the door.

“What was that for?” I asked trying not to show my excitement.

“It was just the governor’s son he was looking for some girl who wore a red dress last night. He said that girl was his princess. She left her phone at the party. But, it wasn’t one of ours sadly.” She said wishing that phone belonged to one of them.

It took everything in me not to run out the door and scream his name. That was my phone. I left it at the party. I am the one in the red dress he is looking for. I’m his princess.

  

I chose my Character writing. I chose this because it is one of my stories I really enjoyed writing. One of my favorite things about my writing was the ending. The ending is shocking and different then you would expect. I represent character well in this piece because I used lots inner thoughts and dialogue. You really get to know Cinderella; what she thinks, does, and acts like. You also learn about her family and how she acts with others. All of these things are key parts of having good character in your story. This is how and why I incorporated character in my story.